crystalkenobi	crystalkenobi@yahoo.com	2006-08-16	id # 668
okay that was the prologue. sorry now chapter one. It’s so obvious,” she whispered with a giggle. “I should prepare to lock them in her bedroom.” Anakin chuckled. “Don’t laugh; it may come to that.” I loved those lines. Dorme and Anakin maybe matchmakers here. The reluntace thing was a good idea too.

crystalkenobi	crystalkenobi@yahoo.com	2006-09-05	id # 673
Chapter 3 I like the converstation obiwan had with himself while hanging onto the droid. I also like how dorme got padme to admit her feelings for obiwan. Chapter 4 I like how you introduce Lara into the story. I wonder since she is close to anakin's age if there will be soemthing there. Now shame on obiwan for using theforce to make her go to sleep, certaining he could have been a little more sensative and admitted his feelings to her then. lol The conversation there was very nice. I like how you had Padme doing just like a reg. person and going into the kitchen to grab a late night snack even though she has servants etc. Chatper 5 I really like this Rina character. I also like the twist in having obiwan go to naboo instead of anakin at this point. That was a nice twist.